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sta.i.rway by Razuri-chan sta.i.rway by Razuri-chan
let out the sparkle


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thank You so much for the long commentaries on the previous works! most of it was really very helpful and I fixed few pictures :) take care~

EDITS: I got most negative opinions about her legs and general composition so I changed that, I hope it looks better now :) thanks~~ :heart:
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This is already such a simple piece but I feel that it makes a really well rounded impact on the artists eyes. The soft colours that merge into the white is very nice, but it also takes away from what there could have been; particularly background speaking, it mainly makes me wonder what the negative space is or what can replace the negative space.

One thing that did strike me when I first saw it was her right leg, it seems a little awkward in shape from the knee to the calf, that may either just be a trick of my eyes or something with how the pose is being balanced. The shading is excellent as always you really have a wonderful eyes of lighting and through out most of your other pieces, I'll say that its your strong suit to make these characters look tangible.

I enjoy the way the face was drawn, such a serene looking presence even though something tells me in that calm state that there maybe an underlying that can be seen just through the artwork.
Beautifully done as always Razuri, I hope I was able to offer any help.
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shy4 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
jak zawsze swietnie, szczegolnie te przejscia tonalne wymiataja :) jedyne co mnie sie bardzo rzuca w oczy to fakt ze od pasa w dol jest jakby inna perspektywa, te nozki wygladaja jakby doczepiane. no i moim zdaniem wiecej przestrzeni by sie przydalo - szerszy kadr?
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Razuri-chan Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
zmienilam kadr, poprawilam nogi :D mam nadzieje,ze teraz wyglada lepiej, dzieki!
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Kkohaku Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Hmm wspominałaś, że chcesz opinii, ale myślę, iż dużo tu nie ma do radzenia:) W sensie do poprawek itp Jedynie co ja bym nieco zmieniła to poszerzyła kompozycję u góry i z prawej strony. Bo fajnie jak ten jej cień tak ucieka w dal i nagle ostro się ucina, ale już tam przy włosach można było trochę przestrzeni zostawić :) Bo teraz nie wiem czy to tak specjalnie czy może po prostu na koniec wykadrowałaś. A reszta jak zwykle super n_n Zwłaszcza zanikające warkocze :)
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Razuri-chan Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
poprawilam kompozycje i jeszcze nogi, bo wyglada na to, ze zastosowalam zbyt delikatny skrot >3> bardzo dziekuje za szczegolowy komentarz >W< tak, caly rysunek zaczal sie od tych zanikajacych warkoczy, potem stwierdzilam,ze w sumie dobrze byloby cos jeszcze dodac xDDD
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Kkohaku Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Teraz wygląda o wiele lepiej :D Zanikające warkoczyki ładnie nawiązują do zanikającego cienia :) i tu i tu rozprasza je światło.
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LuuPetitek Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Na żywo wyglądało lepiej X: ale i tak jest ładne C: podoba mi się to jak zrobiłaś włosy że na końcach się tak rozpuszczają
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denya-chan Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
Wow! Amaizing!
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lovelylynne Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Student General Artist
This is simply stunning.
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Razuri-chan Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
thank You very much! :heart:
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lovelylynne Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Student General Artist
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